Nachdem mein letztes Gedicht auf so positives Feedback gestoßen ist, dachte ich, ich poste mein Neues hier auch mal rein, ich hoffe, der neue Thread ist okay. Feedback in jeder Richtung erwünscht 
(Gibt übrigens wieder ne Melodie, die ist aber noch sehr in den Anfängen, weiß noch nicht, ob da auch ein Lied draus wird.)
What is life (Goodbye)
28/12/2004 (c)RainBowCloud
Sail away
From this place that they call life
In a nutshell, rusted, and it's sure
It's purposed to capsize
But sometimes
I just know I have to try
'cause this world got nothing left for me
So it's time to say goodbye
Life is a game
And a game needs losers
I made my bid
I have to quit
Because my stake was overdone
Life is a sea
And a sea needs cruisers
I'm going down
And now I'll drown
I think I'll write you when I'm gone
Now I know
That I was nothing but abused
You sureley taught me now my lesson
To get yourself amused
Cruel truth
I think it'd fit to quote MacBeth
You thought it's fun to play with me
Now I laugh myself to death
Life is a town
And a town needs loners
It was the proof
I need to move
Because the neighborhood is bad
Life is a fight
And a fight needs goners
I think I'm gone
Now that you've won
Smile at the successes that you had
You feel cool
Because you showed me back my place
I'm irresolute if I should die or
Shoot you into the face
After all
I'm realizing after all
I've got nothing left but hate for you
You may hang it on your wall
Life is a cloud
And a cloud needs raindrops
I'm falling down
I'll hit the ground
For there'll be noone catching me
Life is a storm
And I'm the rooftop
This place is false
Fly somewhere else
This really is no place to be

(Gibt übrigens wieder ne Melodie, die ist aber noch sehr in den Anfängen, weiß noch nicht, ob da auch ein Lied draus wird.)
What is life (Goodbye)
28/12/2004 (c)RainBowCloud
Sail away
From this place that they call life
In a nutshell, rusted, and it's sure
It's purposed to capsize
But sometimes
I just know I have to try
'cause this world got nothing left for me
So it's time to say goodbye
Life is a game
And a game needs losers
I made my bid
I have to quit
Because my stake was overdone
Life is a sea
And a sea needs cruisers
I'm going down
And now I'll drown
I think I'll write you when I'm gone
Now I know
That I was nothing but abused
You sureley taught me now my lesson
To get yourself amused
Cruel truth
I think it'd fit to quote MacBeth
You thought it's fun to play with me
Now I laugh myself to death
Life is a town
And a town needs loners
It was the proof
I need to move
Because the neighborhood is bad
Life is a fight
And a fight needs goners
I think I'm gone
Now that you've won
Smile at the successes that you had
You feel cool
Because you showed me back my place
I'm irresolute if I should die or
Shoot you into the face
After all
I'm realizing after all
I've got nothing left but hate for you
You may hang it on your wall
Life is a cloud
And a cloud needs raindrops
I'm falling down
I'll hit the ground
For there'll be noone catching me
Life is a storm
And I'm the rooftop
This place is false
Fly somewhere else
This really is no place to be